When I had It All

Wonderful writing...strong lines...concise and heartfelt...I hope this gets the music it deserves...

I love the way you pair physical lyrics and consequences with feelings. Moth to a flame/getting burned, black and blue/wrestling.
So beautifully sad. Great Chorus

I love the clear and economical way these lyrics portray the feelings of longing and regret. Superb rhythmic flow.

Ah these are such beautifully sad well written lyrics. I love the pacing and just the brutal simplicity of the deep feelings of regret you convey so well,

I like the originality of the first two lines. They definitely grabbed my attention! "Now a memory of souvenirs" stays with me as it makes me think about what it means. That's a good thing for a lyric to do.

Nice lyrics. There are some really great lines in there. 'Now a memory of souvenirs' is my favourite

lovely flow of the lyrics. my favorite is "Burned your innocent heart
Like a moth to a flame"

A lovely well observed and very mature lyric. Songs always quickly cut to the "you made me cry" but here the one who caused the tears admits they knew what they were doing (albeit regretfully) . Well done. Please let me know if it's picked up. If it turns out right it's the kind of theme I'd love to have a shot at collabing on as a producer or maybe even more.

Great writing! I can hear the ache in the voice to successfully tell this story.

Ouch…These regretful lyrics are very clearly communicated. I like the pre-chorus (Hindsight is…) and the souvenirs line.

Some great lines in here. Andrea. "Memory of souvenirs" is especially inspired. The whole piece feels very song-able.

I have some thoughts on a few of the lines. Feel free to reach out if you'd like to hear them. 🙂

This was certainly worth finishing! I can hear it in my head. Good one!