Lonely City

by @mikeb

Liner Notes

I wrote this 2 weeks ago, and recorded it all in 1 day, but only now getting the chance to finalize the mix. I'll be asking for lyrical help from my usual source.
The 'plot line' is definitely 'Eleanor Rigby' and mandolin part sounds like the Hooters' version of 'Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds', but everything is derivative, you know?

#eleanorrigby
#mandolin

Lyrics

Lonely City ©Michael J Birch 2022

Sirens echo through the nighttime city streets
Calling out to all the lost souls
Some huddle in alleys, some stare through window streaks
All their hardships have taken their toll

City full of lonely people
Suffering alone amongst the crowds
City full of lonely people
Desperation under dark clouds

Old woman limping down the sidewalk
No one alive remembers her name
Alone so long, she’s forgotten how to talk
Nothing to keep her going remains

City full of lonely people
Suffering alone amongst the crowds
City full of lonely people
Desperation under dark clouds

Homeless man, hand stretched out for coins
Family and friends have forgotten him
A shopping cart, a cardboard box, a life destroyed
Left alone for his crimes and sins

City full of lonely people
Suffering alone amongst the crowds
City full of lonely people
Desperation under dark clouds

In this lonely city
There are hundreds of similar tales
Hardly a drop of pity
No one hears their miserable wails
In this lonely city …



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This is really accomplished and moving and evocative- great work all around! Love that descending chord progression, the CSN-style harmonies on the chorus, the mandolin and all the production touches that really work in sync with the concept of the well-stated lyric. great stuff!

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Wonderful strings playing. Your chorus really works well - a nice rhythmic and melodic departure from your verse. I especially like the line "desperation under dark clouds". You have wonderful imagery throughout your song.

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@robs

I especially like the chorus with the interesting harmonies!

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I love this! Starts out with a medieval minstrel feel and then turns into a jangly jam-band groove - and I'm a big, big fan of both. I dig your vocals, too.
Often, I have inadvertent sirens in my songs because I live just a few houses down from a hospital.

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The inspiration behind this made me smile. Awesome playing on the mandolin. You sing very well on this, I feel a combo of Wayne Coyne and Trey Anastasion in the vocal. The chorus evoke some spacey classic rock, CSNY etc, with those harmonies. You bring the lonely people you reference to life. Great track!

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Powerful, powerful lyrical images--and I love how they reference "Eleanor Rigby", one of my favorite Beatles songs. Great job on the music and those vocals, too. REALLY a terrific song! Absolutely "radio-ready"!

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That mandolin absolutely sings out...lovely development of the backing from the intro to the chorus cutting in. Seriously good chorus lyric and music both. There's some serious work gone into the production for which extra applause. A song I could wish I'd written! The cut-though of the mandolin sharpens and throws great relief into the instrumental. Hey, immagonna pinch some of these ideas!

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@jeff9

This lyric is superb, Mike, and I think it's one of the best melodies I've heard of yours. Loved the arrangement, the performance and the whole vibe.

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Some wonderful writing here! "no one alive remembers her name," "Alone so long she's forgotten how to talk."

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the siren sets the scene and the song proper crashes the mood as we are introdiced to this pantheon of maginalized people. the harmony on the chorus takes us to another level. really fine writing, performing , and production.

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@fonte

jeez this is bloody brilliant! What an amazingly authentic sound! Feels very 70s to my ears, which is perfect for me :-) I think you've done a fantastic job on the mix. Well done!